Three Ways The Emotion Thesaurus Helps You Write Better
By Marcy Kennedy (@MarcyKennedy)
As writers, our job is to create a meaningful emotional experience for readers. One of the best ways to do this is to convey the quality and depth of our characters’ feelings through their thoughts, body language, and visceral reactions. This is the primary focus of The Emotion Thesaurus: A Writer’s Guide to Character Expression and is at the root of the “show don’t tell” principle.
– Angela Ackerman & Becca Puglisi in Emotion Amplifiers (A Companion Guide to The Emotion Thesaurus)
Writers are just like every other profession in one important way—the right tools make our job easier.
The Emotion Thesaurus is one of those tools.
When we’re writing, it’s easy to fall into certain standbys without even realizing it. He’s angry—he frowns. She’s frustrated—she sighs.
But those unimaginative responses don’t begin to do credit to the variety of non-verbal communication we use every day or to the unique, three-dimensional characters we’re supposed to create.
That’s where The Emotion Thesaurus comes in. Today I wanted to give you the three ways I think The Emotion Thesaurus can help you write better stories.
(Just for the record – I don’t get any sort of compensation if you buy The Emotion Thesaurus after reading this. I’m recommending it because I’ve used it, liked it, and think it can be a tool almost any fiction writer could benefit from.)
(1) The Emotion Thesaurus Saves Research Time
Because I want to find fresh ways to express emotions in my writing, I often spend a lot of time, especially at the editing stage, looking up emotions online and studying non-verbal communication. Even as someone who has a degree in Social Psychology and loves digging into what makes people tick, I don’t enjoy how much time this eats up and I’m tempted to skip it.
The Emotion Thesaurus brings the research you need together in one place. Each entry defines the emotion and gives physical signals, internal sensations, mental responses, signs of that emotion over the long-term, and cues that the emotion is being repressed.
What that allows us to do is figure out what emotion our character is feeling and look through the lists to find expressions that fit our character and the situation they’re in.
Then we can personalize it. For example, one of the internal sensations for agitation is feeling overheated. How will your character describe that sensation? A middle-aged woman with a good sense of humor might think of it in terms of getting a taste of the hot flashes she’ll experience in menopause. A teenager might liken it to when the air conditioning broke in their house for three whole days. A character with money might describe it as similar to how he felt when he stayed in the sauna too long. Same sensation. Different points of view. Infinite possibilities.
(2) The Emotion Thesaurus Helps with Ideas for Increasing Tension
As you read through the list of characteristics for the emotion you want to convey, you’ll notice some symptoms of that emotion are perfect for increasing tension.
In the agitation entry, the first three mental responses listed are
- Mounting frustration that causes thoughts to blank
- Compounding mistakes
- A tendency to lie to cover up or excuse
You can use agitation to lay the groundwork for bad things to come or to make the current scene more stressful. Many emotions, even positive ones, can have these undesirable consequences.
Becca and Angela also include a “Writer’s Tip” at the end of each emotion with a special hint for other ways you can use that particular emotion to add tension or some other depth to your story.
(3) The Emotion Thesaurus Keeps Characters’ Emotional Arcs Believable
One of the tricks Blake Snyder shares in Save the Cat is that in every scene the character needs to end at a different emotional place from where they began. I struggle with this because I tend to be hyper-logical and tamp down on my emotions. I’m not always certain of the progression an emotion might take in someone who’s less like a Borg.
Becca and Angela added a “May Escalate To” list for each emotion. So, for example, if your character starts the scene agitated (or becomes agitated early on in the scene), you can look at the list and see that likely emotional outcomes by the end of the scene or in the following scene are annoyance, frustration, anxiety, or anger. Then you can go look at the physical signs of those emotions. In helps us bring our character to that next step.
Another thing mentioned by Becca and Angela in their front matter (which is a great look at emotion in itself) is that we often need to seek the root emotion to bring out the correct signs. A person might believe they’re angry, but that anger might actually be a cover-up for something else. So while your character might be screaming at their teenager for wreaking the car, they’re also grabbing their child into a hug because the true emotion isn’t anger—it’s fear and relief that their child survived.
For places where you can buy The Emotion Thesaurus and a lot of great free resources, make sure you check out Becca and Angela’s site The Bookshelf Muse.
What’s your biggest struggle when writing character emotions? Have you checked out The Emotion Thesaurus?
Interested in more ways to improve your writing? Grammar for Fiction Writers is now available from Amazon, Kobo, or Smashwords. (You might also be interested in checking out Showing and Telling in Fiction
or Dialogue: A Busy Writer’s Guide
.)
All three books are available in print and ebook forms.
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Jul 19, 2012 @ 15:03:43
The Emotion Thesaurus is great! I don’t have the book, but I use their blog a lot. The most challenging part for me is keeping it fresh. I tend to gloss over the emotions in the first draft, so I have to layer them in during revision, like you do. Each time I’ve used the Emotion Thesaurus, I’ve managed to come up with something that’s at least a little different.
Jul 20, 2012 @ 01:02:30
That’s how I started out too. I found the Bookshelf Muse and subscribed so that I could get their posts on emotions, weather, character traits, etc. I knew when they came out with The Emotion Thesaurus that it would be worth getting, and I wasn’t disappointed.
Jul 19, 2012 @ 16:58:00
Marcy, thank you so much for the wonderful post about The Emotion Thesaurus. It feels so…validating! awesome! incredible! to know that this books is really making a difference to writers. Becca and I have learned so much from others and it is such an honor to have done something that will help them in return. 🙂
Happy writing!
Angela
Jul 20, 2012 @ 01:04:40
You’re very welcome. I hoping you two eventually do the same with the other thesauruses you have on The Bookshelf Muse 🙂
Jul 21, 2012 @ 19:46:24
Yes we are going to for many, plus some new thesaurus collections, too! 🙂 Thanks again for the shout out and to everyone for the super awesome kind words about the ET & The Bookshelf Muse. *group hug*
Jul 19, 2012 @ 16:59:05
Yep! It sure is ace! Works like a charm on my kindle. When my pond of inspiration is at a low I delve into The Emotion Thesaurus. It’s helped me enhance subtle character traits considerably. Can’t recommend this book enough!
Jul 19, 2012 @ 17:48:19
I have it on my Kindle as well, and it’s perfect for when I’m using Scrivener’s full screen mode so that I don’t get distracted. I don’t have to go to the internet and risk the email and social media black hole just to get the info I need.
Jul 24, 2012 @ 01:39:01
Ooh, what a good idea! Anything to avoid the black hole of distraction!
Jul 19, 2012 @ 17:11:23
I’ve been wanting to get that book. You sold me even more. Going to go order it now.
Patricia Pickrode
w/a Jansen Schmidt
Jul 20, 2012 @ 01:05:03
I hope you find it as helpful as I do 🙂
Jul 19, 2012 @ 19:01:02
Hello Marcy,
You recommended this book to me as a good tool for writers. Everything I’ve heard about it (& now this hekpfuk post) confirms your suggestion. (It’s on my list as the next book to buy when I get more $).
When I write about about character’s emotions, it takes me forever. Look at the following example:
“Her eyes brightened and the apples of her cheeks plumped as they peeked over the birthday card Audrey held. She turned over the gift card and saw the dollar amount on the back. This time, her cheeks grew red. Audrey passed the birthday card to the person on her rignt, but saved the Ikea gift card in her hand as she held her Mom in her arms & squeezed her eyes shut to stop the tears. It was enough money to refurnish her new apartment.”
It took me 20+ minutes to write those few sentences. Granted, I created the idea just then, but it should not take me that long to show the emotions of surprise & joy. In this case I didn’t have to look anything up, but it is typical for me to look online, thesaurus, & in my writing books. I know it’s from writing inconsistently. I am improving, but not as quickly as I want.
Also, I’m not sure if the sentence shows the emotions I want.
Thanks –
Monique
p.s. I won’t tell you how long it took me to write the whole comment! 🙂
Jul 20, 2012 @ 01:15:30
I got a sense of pleasure, but also embarrassment over receiving such a generous gift.
I’ll let you in on a “secret.” I’m a slow writer even with how regularly I write. I think each of us has a natural level where we do our best work. For some people, that means 4,000 or more words a day. For others, it might mean 1,000. I do think we get faster the more we write and the more we push ourselves, but eventually we’ll hit our own personal wall of how many words we can do in a day, and we’ll each have to learn to be satisfied with what we can do rather than comparing ourselves to others.
Jul 21, 2012 @ 14:52:11
I read those sentences again & I think, “cheeks don’t peek;” & there were other actions missing like how Audrey moved to her Mom’s side. So, additional editing would be needed again & again. I don’t compare myself to a specific person. I guess I compare myself to an ideal writer in my mind, and that is going to work against me as a writer.
You’re right Marcy. As I practice more at writing, I’m hoping my “ideal writer” will melt away like the wicked witch of the east. She’s a character. I should name her so I can tell her to take a hike when I sit down to write!! 🙂
Thanks for your feedback, Marcy!
Monique
Jul 19, 2012 @ 19:50:17
I picked up this book a few weeks ago and LOVE it! Not the kindle version. Nope! For a book like this I enjoy flipping through the pages. So great to have right on hand should the need arise. Great info here, Marcy.
Jul 20, 2012 @ 01:07:11
As much as I love my Kindle, I still usually prefer writing craft books in paperback. In this case, however, I’m glad I have it on my Kindle because of the ease of navigation. If I want to get back to the index, I simply click. Or if I want to go to one of the “May Escalate To” emotions, I simply click rather than having to try to find it.
Jul 19, 2012 @ 19:53:55
Great suggestion, Marcy. I have this book, too. It is a great way to remind ourselves to make sure there is some variety in the way our characters are expressing themselves. 🙂
Jul 20, 2012 @ 01:08:44
I think the further I get into the book I’m working on right now, the more helpful it will be. I find that as I get to the late middle and near the end, when I’m wearing out and my creativity is starting to lag, I’m even more vulnerable to just dropping in one of the old standbys for expressing emotions.
Jul 19, 2012 @ 23:43:26
Sold! I really need this book. Thank you, Marcy. But like Debra, I want a physical copy. For me ‘real’ books are the best way to avoid distractions and I find what I’m looking for faster than from my packed Kindle.
Jul 20, 2012 @ 01:11:30
I might feel the same way eventually, but for now my Kindle only has a few hundred books on it (I haven’t had it very long), and I have all my books on writing categorized into a “folder.”
Jul 20, 2012 @ 02:31:02
HMMM, I have to check this one out. It sounds interesting. I, too, would have to get the physical book. I find the Kindle great for novels, but I find it hard to do research on it. I want to go back to previous pages, then to the index, then to…. you get the idea. Flipping and tabbing pages is part of what I do. I know you can highlight on the Kindle, but then you have to search back for the marking.Thanks for this new resource.
Jul 20, 2012 @ 06:50:42
Have I mentioned that I love you, Marcy? 🙂
I have never heard of this book…and am SO glad you shared it. At the first mention, I was at Amazon…checking it out. I’m torn between the physical copy and Kindle version. I’m not that good with the Kindle yet so I’m going to give that some thought.
To clarify, do these ladies also have a book about describing weather? Or is that just stuff you’ll find on their blog?
Jul 20, 2012 @ 12:20:06
Awwww *hugs* 🙂
If you’re not certain, I’d recommend the paper copy. You want to be comfortable with whatever version you get so that you pull it out often.
They don’t yet have another book. The weather entries are currently free on their blog. I’m hoping one day they turn it into a book as well.
Jul 20, 2012 @ 13:13:25
I just got this book a couple of weeks ago, and it’s been a big help as I edit my WIP. Love the way it’s organized, and it’s great for those times when you know you want your character to express a certain emotion but don’t want to use a clichéd action or dialogue.
Well worth the $$:)
Jul 24, 2012 @ 01:44:20
I follow the Bookshelf Muse, too, and I knew about the book, but it wasn’t until your post that I decided I really need to buy it.
The real reason I’ve come back to this post is that the teacher/leader of a critique group at the Indiana Writer’s Center mentioned it the Emotion Thesaurus as a good resource, and when I told him I had a writing friend who just recommended it, he said your blog is how he found out about it, but he couldn’t find it again. You’re influencing more people than you know, Marcy!
Jul 24, 2012 @ 01:49:10
I’ve already ordered a copy.
I knew I made the right choice after reading this.
Jul 26, 2012 @ 00:46:29
Love this tool. It’s my go to when I get stuck. Thanks for this post too, there’s more in the book than you realize.
Aug 02, 2012 @ 20:44:04
Thanks for the post, Marcy. You have persuaded me to buy it.
And I think I will recommend it to the 11 people who were in my Write! Canada nonfiction writing class in June, many of whom are doing memoir or biography. It will help with the show don’t tell principle that is just as important in producing compelling nonfiction as in fiction.
I too am torn between the hard copy and the Kindle version. I don’t have a Kindle, but I do plan to buy the next generation Apple iPad when it comes out, and I do have the Kindle app for my iPhone and Mac laptop. So I think I’ll go that route for 4.99, could always buy hard copy later. (Besides, in Canada the hard copy is out of stock and on back order at amazon.ca.)
I also am considering buying Scrivener for Mac. I take it that you recommend it? I would be using it primarily for nonfiction, but from what I’ve read it’s just as good for that as for fiction writers.
FYI: A brand new book Scrivener for Dummies is about to be released, right now it’s half-price at $15 on amazon.ca for pre-order, which is a deal that is virtually as good as the amazon.com price.
Aug 02, 2012 @ 21:07:05
I recently switched from using Word to using Scrivener, and it’s worth the money. I’ll actually be doing a post about some of the features I love on Scrivener a couple months from now. You’ll still need to export to Word to submit your work anywhere or if you’re sending it out to an editor, but the export process is easy (they call it “Compile” in the PC version, which is what I have).
Scrivener does have options for both non-fiction and fiction. So far, I’ve only used it for fiction, but I’ve heard from others who are working on a non-fiction book using Scrivener and they love it as much as I do for fiction.
Aug 02, 2012 @ 21:17:32
I love Scrivener, and I’m glad it’s finally out for PC users too. Traditionally, it’s half price if you do NaNoWriMo in November and complete your 50,000 words. So if budget is an issue and you’re thinking about doing NaNo, that could make a difference as to when you buy it. Just FYI.
Aug 13, 2012 @ 15:21:30
I’ve had the book for a while, Marcy, and I read it when I first bought it — but hadn’t used it at all. I also have a list of emotions called “Emotional Thesaurus” I collected somewhere that shows escalating emotional states, which is helpful. Thanks for giving us some good ways to use these tools. Oh, and I have mine on the Kindle app on my iPad and on my Mac. I like craft books in hard copy, but since I work in various places on my laptop, the convenience of having the books with me all the time trumps the feel of the pages turning. For me, it’s all about convenience. 🙂
Mar 08, 2013 @ 05:59:00
Have the book, use the book, LOVE the book!